More. More. More. Have I mentioned the word "more" yet?
Like others have said you caught the feeling of the characters very well. It feels like Carson and Rodney rather than two other people bearing their names.
I like the way you did Carson's accent, the people that do tend to depict it, usually tend to over do it, I think you hit just the right balance.
" "You’re not supposed to be in here. You have to leave.” McKay took a step forward, chin jutting up in a way that made every hair on Carson’ neck bristle with indignation. “Right. Now.”
“No.”
“No?” The man gaped like he’d never heard the word before."
That is so Carson :D he's a softie but there's no way he'll be pushed around. I love how he's always so nice to Rodney but refuses to take anything from him. Gentle, kind but totally in charge. :)
“You have introduced me to quite an array o’ complex things over th’ last few months. Granted, they have all come on a plate and been accompanied by a basket of crusty bread, but th’ point is…”
Very Carson again and very entertaining.
I'd love to see some more of this, to see where it goes and if you want to up the rating that's fine by me as well! lol
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on 2006-08-30 07:43 pm (UTC)Like others have said you caught the feeling of the characters very well. It feels like Carson and Rodney rather than two other people bearing their names.
I like the way you did Carson's accent, the people that do tend to depict it, usually tend to over do it, I think you hit just the right balance.
" "You’re not supposed to be in here. You have to leave.” McKay took a step forward, chin jutting up in a way that made every hair on Carson’ neck bristle with indignation. “Right. Now.”
“No.”
“No?” The man gaped like he’d never heard the word before."
That is so Carson :D he's a softie but there's no way he'll be pushed around. I love how he's always so nice to Rodney but refuses to take anything from him. Gentle, kind but totally in charge. :)
“You have introduced me to quite an array o’ complex things over th’ last few months. Granted, they have all come on a plate and been accompanied by a basket of crusty bread, but th’ point is…”
Very Carson again and very entertaining.
I'd love to see some more of this, to see where it goes and if you want to up the rating that's fine by me as well! lol