Lovely! And no scary bits! I enjoyed this despite not being a fan. Some almost-poetry going on: They walk side by side and the wheat whispering against their thighs sounds like a goodbye. The sun is warm against his back, midday heat mellowing into the long afternoon. And then the references to wheat, grass, etc. throughout highlight the discrepancy between peaceful farmland and murder. I think the non-linear form makes the story stronger - and unlke some non-linear fics this was perfectly easy to read/understand!
P.S. There is huge spider by the kitchen sink. I'm so glad he hid while you were here!
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ninetydegrees
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on 2006-09-30 01:14 pm (UTC)Some almost-poetry going on:
They walk side by side and the wheat whispering against their thighs sounds like a goodbye. The sun is warm against his back, midday heat mellowing into the long afternoon.
And then the references to wheat, grass, etc. throughout highlight the discrepancy between peaceful farmland and murder.
I think the non-linear form makes the story stronger - and unlke some non-linear fics this was perfectly easy to read/understand!
P.S. There is huge spider by the kitchen sink. I'm so glad he hid while you were here!
P.P.S. I posted my heyerfic. LoM here I come!