Regarding transitions: I agree about the difficulty. Sometimes I just want to write "and then they went to the hallway and then to the living room and then they sat down and the livingroom looked like this"

I think most things that people write are carefully constructed. At least for me, there are very few passages in my own work that are truly organic and flow without me having to work to get them out. I think writing itself is a very un-organic product, because you do go over it and change things and construct layers from nothingness. - this is very interesting. Writing is like that for me sometimes, but sometimes you just "get in to the groove" (and yes, I'm humming it now) and the story flows out. But I find that in order to get to that point you have to work hard. For me the "inspiration" grows directly from the actual process of writing. If I don't sit down and write, it doesn't happen.

On the cock sucking hobby. The way I read it was that it was Ray's imagination, something that he wanted to impose upon Chris, something that made what he did more understandable, more okay. Like he is telling himself "He wanted it all along, he needs it, he's done it before", just to justify it to himself. - that's just... yeah. Goes to show that reader's bring their own interpretation to the text. I didn't think it that deeply at all when writing, but I'm so pleased people got more out it than what I intended!

But you made it so sudden and so much inside the actual scene that it read as something part of the sex instead of something that had to be set up separate from it. - Wow, thank you! That's really good to hear. Spanking as part of sex I like, but as domestic discipline it falls flat for me.

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. I'm really pleased people have found this interesting.