ext_86206 ([identity profile] galacticowl.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] kat_lair 2006-10-03 03:56 pm (UTC)

You use a lot of beautiful imagery. The following is especially gorgeous:

"The smell of cigarette smoke and booze is so strong he can taste it, the press and heat of bodies making his skin tingle. Sam wants to spread his arms wide open, like a butterfly pinned down mid-flight, unable to do anything but accept the impossible."

Plus, you make the reader feel they are

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